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sometimes
if we were lucky
the sun would rise before we went to bed
and i recalled how it was only ever
the people who had it the worst who used to say
'one day there will be sunlight'
like one of those six word stories.
one day there would be sunlight.
and i remember how it was only ever the people
who were serving their life sentences
who i would ask 'what's it like to never see the sun'
and they would only ever  answer
'it's enough just to know it's there'
and i always wanted to take out one word
seven was too long; but i didnt want to take out
the meaning.
and it was odd because i wondered
what hope these people had.
but as it so turned out
the most hopeful of them all
were the ones whose hope was on the inside
and whose stories were thirteen words long
like some strange unlucky number
"one day there will be sunlight"...
but as it so turned out
"...it's enough just to know it's there."
idk.
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Given 2013-03-18
the thirteen words of prison by ~Furresoto is an endearing poem made powerful by its parting thoughts. ( Suggested by Emmi-Kat and Featured by Nichrysalis )
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Anna-95 Featured By Owner Mar 20, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
oh, this was nice to read. i feel kind of sad, but kind of happy reading this.
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:iconfurresoto:
Furresoto Featured By Owner Mar 21, 2013   Traditional Artist
I'm very glad you liked it, thank you for reading. (:
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:iconfeatherlynnexwarrior:
FeatherlynneXWarrior Featured By Owner Mar 18, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
"It's enough just to know it's there." Simply beautiful and mystifyingly honest. Gorgeous piece.
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:iconfurresoto:
Furresoto Featured By Owner Mar 21, 2013   Traditional Artist
Wow...thank you so much! (: Thank you for taking the time to read it.
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:iconfeatherlynnexwarrior:
FeatherlynneXWarrior Featured By Owner Mar 21, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
The title intrigued me, so I read it :D Great job! Keep it up!
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:iconphantomgoth:
PhantomGoth Featured By Owner Mar 18, 2013  Student General Artist
I really like this! It's dark and mysterious... Yet honest
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:iconfurresoto:
Furresoto Featured By Owner Mar 21, 2013   Traditional Artist
Thank you! (:
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:iconphantomgoth:
PhantomGoth Featured By Owner Mar 22, 2013  Student General Artist
Oh of course!! =D
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aprilwednesday Featured By Owner Mar 18, 2013   Writer
this is such a beautifully poignant and original poem. the whole premise is really interesting - i love the way you brought in six word stories and then twisted the concept of them, and the repetition of the six words is very effective. congrats on the DD, you really deserve it! :love:
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:iconfurresoto:
Furresoto Featured By Owner Mar 21, 2013   Traditional Artist
Haha I love six word stories. ^^ Thank you very much!
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:icontrylledrik:
Trylledrik Featured By Owner Mar 18, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Wow. "idk" :P This is so great. I loved it. Your DD was totally well deserved :dalove:
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:iconfurresoto:
Furresoto Featured By Owner Mar 21, 2013   Traditional Artist
Thank you so much! I'm glad you feel it was worthy.
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:iconbirdie121:
Birdie121 Featured By Owner Mar 18, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Wow, wonderful writing!
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:iconfurresoto:
Furresoto Featured By Owner Mar 21, 2013   Traditional Artist
Oh, thank you! Thank you for reading. (:
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:iconthe-sand-prince:
the-sand-prince Featured By Owner Mar 18, 2013
this is a amazing new look on prison
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:iconfurresoto:
Furresoto Featured By Owner Mar 18, 2013   Traditional Artist
Thank you. (:
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:iconthe-sand-prince:
the-sand-prince Featured By Owner Mar 18, 2013
nice to have a excellent poet such as yourself speak to me
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:iconfurresoto:
Furresoto Featured By Owner Mar 21, 2013   Traditional Artist
Thank you very much. (: These comments mean a lot to me.
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:iconmidnight-rain9:
Midnight-Rain9 Featured By Owner Mar 18, 2013
this imagination so good.
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:iconfurresoto:
Furresoto Featured By Owner Mar 18, 2013   Traditional Artist
Thank you! c:
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:iconmidnight-rain9:
Midnight-Rain9 Featured By Owner Mar 18, 2013
You so welcome, I love poems. Keep it up. I would like to be friend with you. check out my profil
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:iconfurresoto:
Furresoto Featured By Owner Mar 18, 2013   Traditional Artist
Thank you very much. (: I did, I like your art style. ^^
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:iconmidnight-rain9:
Midnight-Rain9 Featured By Owner Mar 18, 2013
thank you...
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:iconfurresoto:
Furresoto Featured By Owner Mar 21, 2013   Traditional Artist
(: No problem!
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:iconfurresoto:
Furresoto Featured By Owner Mar 18, 2013   Traditional Artist
Thank you! c:
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Twilight16Master Featured By Owner Mar 18, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
the most powerful poetry is that which stirs the heart and the imagination. well done. that stirred me.
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:iconfurresoto:
Furresoto Featured By Owner Mar 18, 2013   Traditional Artist
Wow, thank you! (: That means a lot!
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:icontwilight16master:
Twilight16Master Featured By Owner Mar 19, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
I say it only because I mean it. ^_^ truly, I should be thanking you for writing that.
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:iconfurresoto:
Furresoto Featured By Owner Mar 21, 2013   Traditional Artist
Man...that makes me so happy to know that you enjoyed it so much. thank you once again! :hug:
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:icontwilight16master:
Twilight16Master Featured By Owner Apr 1, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
of course! :) :hug:
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:iconryanisnasty:
ryanisnasty Featured By Owner Mar 18, 2013
Congratulations on the well deserved DD!
:huggle:
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:iconfurresoto:
Furresoto Featured By Owner Mar 18, 2013   Traditional Artist
Thank you. (:
I dont know...I dont feel like it measures up to the poetry I read in the DDs. I don't feel like it's as unique or resonating as most lit. DDs are. But thank you so much for reading. (:
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ryanisnasty Featured By Owner Mar 18, 2013
Your welcome, this is one of my favorite pieces of literature I've ever seen as a DD. The concept is amazing and it is completely original. You have a lot of talent, I can tell by reading this. You completely deserved this DD! :huggle:
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:iconfurresoto:
Furresoto Featured By Owner Mar 18, 2013   Traditional Artist
Wow...that means a lot to me. (: Thank you so much! I guess poetry is all a matter of who reads it, we all see the same thing differently.
Thank you...that was one of the nicest compliments I've ever received. :hug:
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ryanisnasty Featured By Owner Mar 18, 2013
Your welcome :)
:tighthug:

And I'm going to watch you so when you post more poems, I can see them^^
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:iconfurresoto:
Furresoto Featured By Owner Mar 18, 2013   Traditional Artist
Ahh, thank you so much for the watch! :D
I must warn you though, Im primarily a cartoon person. I write poetry when I'm on an art block.
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:iconryanisnasty:
ryanisnasty Featured By Owner Mar 18, 2013
Your welcome~
And your cartoons are really good too^^
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:iconfurresoto:
Furresoto Featured By Owner Mar 18, 2013   Traditional Artist
Well thank you so much for saying so. (:
Thank you for taking the time to look at my stuff.
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XRosewaterX Featured By Owner Mar 18, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Beautiful :rose:
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:iconfurresoto:
Furresoto Featured By Owner Mar 18, 2013   Traditional Artist
Thank you very much for taking the time to read. (:
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XRosewaterX Featured By Owner Mar 18, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
You're welcome :)
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:iconzexianna:
zexianna Featured By Owner Mar 18, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
This is really cool, I love this concept so much. Very vivid and original.
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:iconfurresoto:
Furresoto Featured By Owner Mar 18, 2013   Traditional Artist
Thank you very much for reading. =) Im happy that you liked it.
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:iconwerewwulf:
werewwulf Featured By Owner Mar 18, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Congrats on the DD :heart:
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:iconfurresoto:
Furresoto Featured By Owner Mar 18, 2013   Traditional Artist
Thank you so much Val! <3 :D
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:iconamyroxechao:
AmyRoxeChao Featured By Owner Mar 18, 2013  Hobbyist Artist
cool,so creative!
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:iconfurresoto:
Furresoto Featured By Owner Mar 18, 2013   Traditional Artist
Aw, thank you for reading. ^^ I'm glad you liked it.
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:iconamyroxechao:
AmyRoxeChao Featured By Owner Mar 30, 2013  Hobbyist Artist
you're welcome
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:iconshineeserendipity:
ShineeSerenDipity Featured By Owner Mar 18, 2013  Student Writer
This is brilliant!
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:iconfurresoto:
Furresoto Featured By Owner Mar 18, 2013   Traditional Artist
Oh, thank you so much!
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