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sometimes
if we were lucky
the sun would rise before we went to bed
and i recalled how it was only ever
the people who had it the worst who used to say
'one day there will be sunlight'
like one of those six word stories.
one day there would be sunlight.
and i remember how it was only ever the people
who were serving their life sentences
who i would ask 'what's it like to never see the sun'
and they would only ever  answer
'it's enough just to know it's there'
and i always wanted to take out one word
seven was too long; but i didnt want to take out
the meaning.
and it was odd because i wondered
what hope these people had.
but as it so turned out
the most hopeful of them all
were the ones whose hope was on the inside
and whose stories were thirteen words long
like some strange unlucky number
"one day there will be sunlight"...
but as it so turned out
"...it's enough just to know it's there."
idk.
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Given 2013-03-18
the thirteen words of prison by ~Furresoto is an endearing poem made powerful by its parting thoughts. ( Suggested by Emmi-Kat and Featured by Nichrysalis )
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Anna-95 Featured By Owner Mar 20, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
oh, this was nice to read. i feel kind of sad, but kind of happy reading this.
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Furresoto Featured By Owner Mar 21, 2013   Traditional Artist
I'm very glad you liked it, thank you for reading. (:
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FeatherlynneXWarrior Featured By Owner Mar 18, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
"It's enough just to know it's there." Simply beautiful and mystifyingly honest. Gorgeous piece.
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Furresoto Featured By Owner Mar 21, 2013   Traditional Artist
Wow...thank you so much! (: Thank you for taking the time to read it.
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FeatherlynneXWarrior Featured By Owner Mar 21, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
The title intrigued me, so I read it :D Great job! Keep it up!
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PhantomGoth Featured By Owner Mar 18, 2013  Student General Artist
I really like this! It's dark and mysterious... Yet honest
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Furresoto Featured By Owner Mar 21, 2013   Traditional Artist
Thank you! (:
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PhantomGoth Featured By Owner Mar 22, 2013  Student General Artist
Oh of course!! =D
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aprilwednesday Featured By Owner Mar 18, 2013   Writer
this is such a beautifully poignant and original poem. the whole premise is really interesting - i love the way you brought in six word stories and then twisted the concept of them, and the repetition of the six words is very effective. congrats on the DD, you really deserve it! :love:
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Furresoto Featured By Owner Mar 21, 2013   Traditional Artist
Haha I love six word stories. ^^ Thank you very much!
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